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(dreamer by neslihans)



Summertime, a favourite past time
The favourable past we attempt to live by
Which haunts us so
We icon against Marilyn herself

What was done, has been undoneAdd Image
It's undoing now done
And so I, too, am done.

The favourable past, which must be left in the past
As now IS our favourable time to live by
...summertime.

By Janet Jarrell

The NaiSaiKu Challenge http://naisaiku.blogspot.com/

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  1. lostmermaidJuly 9, 2009 at 1:06 AM

    a new twist to the naisaikus !! i liked this style :)

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  2. Tumblewords:July 9, 2009 at 1:52 PM

    Nice style - I like this one!

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  3. andyJuly 9, 2009 at 5:36 PM

    Summertime, phew! a bit of a tongue twister!!

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  4. Janet JarrellJuly 10, 2009 at 10:35 AM

    Thank you all for checking in - this did not sound like a tongue twister in my head, nor did it appear to be when I wrote it down and scibbled all around it on the paper...then I read it. Funny twist.

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  5. Kenia CrisJuly 10, 2009 at 10:58 AM

    Though I'm not a big fan of summertime, I liked your lines a lot. The twist feels like a big hug!

    Kiss on the tip of your nose!

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  6. Kenia CrisJuly 12, 2009 at 4:26 PM

    I know, I know - me again!! It's just to tell you that there's an award for you in Poesia Torta. Kiss your eyes!

    Love from Brazil!

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  7. PrintempsJuly 13, 2009 at 1:02 AM

    i love this summertime...thanks for that comment...Thanks Kenia for introducing me to a new friend...

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